OT: I don't really have much time so I gave it a skim; the writing and imagery is pretty solid, but some of the word choice seems out of place for the setting:
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The sound of footsteps befell his ears, but they were not of human origin. The melody had a deeper much more potent ring than any regular two legged creature could create. And then the repeating unholy note became faster, whatever massive creature was after him had gone into a hurried struggling sprint.
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Those two words in particular didn't feel quite true to the situation. Aside from that, I like it. Nice job.