Posted by KristenGW

Maybe just expand the sentence, because I just didn't notice the part where he said it. Honestly I should've been paying more attention lol

Posted by Nerdmaid

"I've always liked the rain, it helps me sleep." said the boy, while staring out the window as it poured down with rain. "When I was your age, I used to hate the rain. My mother wouldn't allow me to play outside when it did," saying, whilst I close my eyes and tilt my up towards the ceiling. "Now I find it the most calming thing there is to listen to..."

I've always liked the sound of the rain, it helps me to sleep.
Peering out of the window- Staring sounds too intense
'said the boy, peering out the window upon the dreary downpour. Joining him, I said:'
"When I was your age, I used to hate the rain. My mother wouldn't allow me to play outside when it did,"
Looking up towards the ceiling, I said:
"Now, I find it the most calming thing there that there is to listen to..."

I didn't fix the tensing here I had overlooked that.

Here are a few suggestions for cleaning up the final paragraph... They may not be fully correct, however I found it really difficult to read and this is how I would probably word it.

Posted by TWIZ

You also switched tenses in a few spots. Try sticking to just present tense. I think for the last paragraph you just need to add clarification by adding to it in certain parts.